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>as for the story so far,it feels immersive despite the breaks you have been writing it every now and then.

Glad it does feel immersive to ya. So part of it is working at least!

>It's surprisingly cohesive and the most interesting part is what she thinks from the inside while dealing with average situations.

This I suppose maybe from me always making internal observations myself. Not sure if that is a strength or a weakness in the long term but I think it works here.