Anon 11/28/2018 (Wed) 23:41:39 No.2684 del
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>Shouldn't it be measures? Or is there a meaning to the wording that I'm not getting at?
in theory, it´s measures. You are right. Measurements is the action of using a meter or quantifying physical property even though the same word in Spanish is the same. I have fixed that, thanks.

>I think that it should be worded: not that it turned to black.
I meant that regalia earned an orange color instead of getting the black color because of combustion (as one would expect). Fixed that either way.

>I've always been hesitant when it comes to grammer as I've never considered myself to have an eye for it, but I'm trying to be more helpful and these two sticked out to me as a little awkward/possibly erroneous.
yeah, thanks a lot. It´s always welcome to keep an eye on that and try to become a little bit better. However, I am surprised that I have written around 3700 words for this part in just one night and the only awkward mistakes to be found are those (so far).

>Plus all the tag errors with Luna's dialog
that was frustrating as hell. I sighed after checking that problem.I expected that the lines for Garble or Daybreaker would share this problem but they didn´t. Not a single line of the colored text for them has had this problem yet the blue one doesn´t work that well. I will have to test it a few times before posting the next part or deleting the incorrect post that only shows black text instead of blue.

>It depends on how close to the show you plan to stick to and what you consider that even to be.
that´s the core art of writing and freedom of creating literally anything.
>But you have to ask yourself this: if Equestrian had a war would you portray death? Say you wrote a fic in the alternate Sombra timeline, would you put death in it.
depends on what purpose I would try to convey with it. Those deaths have to add a message for the story. It has to complement it. If they don´t, I would focus on something else. There has to be something beyond that before putting them onto the table for a childish show like this one.

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