>>75588
I liked it, especially the part where she confesses that she likes older men.

Needs more buildup tho to be catharthic, she needs to resist her urges more to get that sweet-sweet release at the moment of her first ever orgasm as she finally admits: "Yes!! I fucking LOVE older men!"

>and hot goth guys
But this part ruined it. Why would you want hot guys in your erotic fan fiction?