Anon 12/15/2019 (Sun) 23:21:04 No.5199 del
>>5196
>I just don't know why it doesn't break with other color formating...
maybe Odili is the one that actually leads the stars.....at bringing as some "light" more like an explanation for this bug

>Though next time I'd like to try for more consistency. Pink against the blue is also a bit of a pain to read without highlighting it.
if that doesn´t convince you, you can point out in a post what color belongs to X character and what represents the narrative. I have read this without the colours and it´s a little bit confusing but checking it again, it seems that Cosmos goes in pink, her narrative in black and the rest are the stars that have bored her and have tried to establish a pointless debate with her (correct me if I am wrong).

>Take your time.
I am going to need it but keep in mind that I have already read it entirely. I mean, from short little greens that were bits of shitposting to three entire fics (four if Cadencebat counts as a complete one) that....well, the narration dominates the protagonist´s mind.

This goes more in the line of the Revolution fic in the sense that the first existential posts make you wonder a little bit if someone´s reading a MLP fic or the philosophy established from that character, almost as if Cosmos has had too much time to think. It´s not until Luna is mentioned in the conversation (implying that this conversation happened in Episode 1) and especially towards the end, where the story starts to take off to somewhere else. Her rebellious attitude actually changes the tone and the ambient of the fic simultaneously.It seems more like an introduction than anything else.

I can relate with two things (according to your implications) about her: never listening to anyone else and the fact that the stars were too pretentious to even prove their points. However, I can´t tell how much of the author´s brain is implied over here (besides show´s canon). Either it is about criticizing narcissism or it´s about measuring the levels of edginess with a prestablished mindset so the future actions can have their context. Because again, all it seems that this fic is leading for something else that we don´t know (which makes sense considering that you have admitted not reading beyond the first two issues, just focusing on the lore more than Cosmos´ character/behaviour).

I could go beyond with this but these are my first impressions so it doesn´t feel like I have left your work behind (like I did with the Mare in the Mountain). This is mostly because of:

>I'll be busy

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