Anon 12/27/2019 (Fri) 00:26:09 No.5251 del
so basically, Cosmos acts as a troll and the trigger or plot device that leads up to this situation is that the stars moved because Luna was coming back to Equestria and while she was getting defeated by her sister, Cosmos messes up her old boring partners at asking questions out of curiosity, testing how much information she can get out of them. Not only that but the stars get driven into madness at reaffirming themselves at how Cosmos is so adventurous to even make such questions and she manages to drive them into her territory, discovering the fun she can get out of it.

To me, I interpret that this fic was inspired or an allegory of Pandora´s box, opening said box out of sheer curiosity, with one simple action and causing so much trouble and aggravating consequences. However, the consequences wouldn´t pay off and turn out to be visible into this world until much later, so she stays hibernating for a while. Cosmos realizes about how that planet, notices which planet she is going to take over and noting two main characters that we know: Celestia and Luna.

However, the biggest contradiction that this fic might have is that she doesn´t have an special correlation towards Princess Luna, she uses the Mistress as any other tool for attracting Discord in the comics. If she had any sort of interest towards Luna, she would have left a sign towards her. But nope, she just took over her body with another star to link and complete her full corporeal form.

It becomes clear that this fic is more based around that fan theory about Twilight´s symbol and the implication of those four stars surrounding the moon in the premiere. Cosmos doesn´t acknowledge Luna as a special pony who wanted to have a personal connection and a motivation to take over Equestria. If anything, Luna was just a means to an end so Cosmos could meet Discord again. What is useful though, it´s that she acknowledges that Celestia could be a huge obstacle for her plans.

So what can I say towards this fic? Overall, if we are taking into account that the author is tinkering around a fan theory, combining that with the implied lore about Cosmos, this fic could be a pretty interesting take to consider and also would explain a little bit of that unknown destiny that we have seen in FiM.

The biggest flaw that I can point out in this fic are the lack of "she said" or punctuation signs. On Endchan, the colours fit amazingly well but on FIMFiction or any other place without the coloring features, one can get somewhat confused (at least personally speaking). And the 2nd flaw that I can take out of it but this is more subtle, it´s that (from what I´ve read from the comics) is that Cosmos doesn´t have any special connection nor intentions towards Luna in the comics. Otherwise she would have a dropped a mysterious line or personal attachment towards her. Although I understand why you did this action and for the theme of this thread, you have nailed it at trying to combine the concept of this /night/ thread and Cosmos herself. If you intended that, it´s nicely done.

And what else? Do I have to mention the descriptions again? I fail to see anything wrong with them here honestly. The adjectives are varied, the tone of the fic slowly progresses as it advances through it and I consider it, a slow burner. The fic does work better when you realize where this fic is placed in the timeline.

Conceptually speaking, this fic emphasizes a lot in its theme and lore standpoints. In this regard, it shines better than the other two. It´s less confusing than the Revolution fic but not quite as obvious and direct like The Mare In the Mountain. In terms of entertainment, I prefer the fic about Cadence´s mystery but I can predict this story as a grower for a few fans and pick this one.

A fanfic made for ending the decade and mark an era of post gen 4, when the interpretations and the stories are implied and interpreted from the fans in hindsight. A welcome addition to your catalog so you have a third high profile fic to expose out there. I give it the green light.