>>7572
>are any of you familiar with "poetry"?
Not very, as I said:
>>7560
>Poetry wasn't strong.
...
>A mere simpleton I am.
>My grasp English uncertain.

>Uhm ... here you go?
Honestly, I think it works well enough. My lack of knowedge on the subject not withstanding.

>A noise made -- locate that!
>both ponies and there we sat.
I think it has a slight Dr. Suess quallity with the use of "that" and "sat" again based off my limited knowledge of poetry but I find this working well enough both in a cute way and in contrast with such lines as:
>packed and encamped, a trek for hell.
>straight outta Doom, portal tech's might.